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With the advent of social media, more people are getting their news online instead of from print media. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who read news online.

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 significant number of citizens
who
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prefer to read
news
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 online rather than printed newspapers
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 the advancement of social media platforms. There are both benefits and drawbacks
of
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to
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 reading
news
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 online,
however
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, the advantages outweigh the downsides. On the one hand, the
e-readers
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number of e-readers
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incase
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in case
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 of newspapers
are
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is
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 increasing
drammatically
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dramatically
 in
this
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 contemporary society
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 the improvement of social media like Facebook, Tiktok, X, and
Instragram
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Instagram
.
Firstly
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, reading soft
copy
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copies
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 is convenient and
more
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cheaper than
previously
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previous
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 hard copies as they do not need to buy
papers
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paper
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.
Secondly
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, It can be read from any
parts
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 of the world
as well as
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 they have the chance to get old
news
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 from the archive.
Moreover
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,
this
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 process is
environment
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environmentally
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 friendly as they do not require any raw materials (trees) to print
this
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news
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.
For instance
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,
according to
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 the investigation
of
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by
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 BBC
bangla
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Bangla
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, Bangladeshi newspaper companies require more than 1 million tons
paper
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of paper
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 to cover their
news
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 in a year, which
have
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 a significant negative impact on our forests.
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, sometimes we see that it is common for online newspapers
publishing
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to publish
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 some fake
news
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 to catch
people
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people's
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 attention which is not possible in printed versions.
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, advertisements kill time
while
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 reading
in
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on
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 an online platform.
In addition
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,
bule
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blue
 rays come during
reading
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the reading
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 which is too deleterious to our eye.
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, a research paper was published by the University of Dhaka, they explained that more than 78 %
eye
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of eye
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 problems were
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 the radiation
came
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coming
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 from digital devices like
moblies
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mobiles
,
laptops
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and laptops
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. In conclusion, reading
news
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in
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on
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 online websites enables people to get
news
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 promptly
with
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at
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 a cheap price, which would take at least one day
previously
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apply
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.
Although
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, there are some disadvantages like
heath
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health
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 problems
but
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the facilities outweigh the downsides.

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coherence cohesion
Try to maintain consistency in terms and tone. For instance, use either 'e-readers' or 'online readers' consistently when discussing those who prefer reading news online.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using phrases such as 'On the one hand' without following it clearly with 'on the other hand.' Ensure the contrasting points are clearly linked. Consider utilizing linking words effectively to enhance logical flow.
task achievement
Provide a clearer explanation for terms like 'soft copy' and elaborate on their benefits more explicitly to ensure clarity.
task achievement
Avoid some repetitive information, such as stating advantages outweigh disadvantages twice, as it might dilute the strength of your argument.
task achievement
The essay successfully addresses both advantages and disadvantages of online news consumption, ensuring a complete response to the prompt.
task achievement
Examples such as the BBC Bangla investigation and the University of Dhaka study add credibility and relevance to the points discussed.
coherence cohesion
The essay opens with a clear introduction and concludes with a summary of the key points, aiding readability.

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