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The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004.

The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004.
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The pie charts illustrate the types of
courses
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 chosen by students in three different years: 1984, 1994, and 2004.
Overall
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, the main course categories remained the same across all periods, including face-to-face, correspondence, and mixed media
courses
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.
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, an additional option, online
courses
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, was introduced in 1994 and continued into 2004. The most popular course type throughout the three years was face-to-face learning. In 1984,
this
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 method accounted for 67% of student enrollment, but its popularity decreased over time, dropping to 54% in 1994 and
further
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 to 40% by 2004. Correspondence
courses
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 were the second most
favored
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 option in 1984 and 1994, both accounting for around 20% of the total.
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, by 2004, mixed media
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 had become more popular, making up 35% of student enrollments, surpassing correspondence
courses
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. The least popular
courses
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 varied across the years. In 1984, mixed media
courses
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 were the least chosen, representing only 13% of the total. In 1994, with the introduction of online
courses
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,
this
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 new category became the least
favored
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, with only 11% of students opting for it.
This
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 trend continued into 2004, where online
courses
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 remained the least chosen option, accounting for just 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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