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It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children. Is this a good way of providing work for others? Should people do these things themselves?

#somebody #time #household #chores #children #work #people
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There is the possibility to hire someone to do some
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works
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work
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 we do not have
time
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 to do including housework or
take
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 care of our baby. I believe,
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 people should do their
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works
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work
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 as much as possible,
this
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 is a good
way
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 to provide a
part
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part-time
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time
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 job for others for two
compeling
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compelling
 reasons. The first reason is, by acting
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way
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 we save
time
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 for other tasks and
jobs
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. If we have a tight deadline for a job,
this
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 would be a wise
way
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 to have more
time
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 to concentrate
to
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 our project.
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,
last
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 month I had a project with
one week
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 deadline and I
hire
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 an individual to cook for me during the week. She was happy with the payment and I finished my project on
time
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. The second reason is that
this
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 is a good
way
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 for those who
they
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are not allowed to have
full
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full-time
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time
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jobes
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jobs
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 like students from other countries. By providing
such
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part
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part-time
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time
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jobs
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 they can earn some
money
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 that they need to spend
for
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on
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accomodation
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accommodation
 or food.
A research
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 by Harvard University,
reviels
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reveals
 that 30% of
student
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students
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 are dependent on these types of
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works
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work
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 to
spend
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pay
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 their bills and help them
in
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with
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 financial problems. People should do
such
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 duties as much as they can by themselves because if they do
this
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 all the
time
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 they promote
lazyness
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laziness
 in society. Another problem that can
accure
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occur
accrue
 is that if they spend their
money
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for
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jobs
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 they can do by
themeselves
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themselves
 regularly , they miss the chance to pay for services which are essential during the month.
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, sometimes we need to pay for health care services and if we
had
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spent our
money
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for
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the mentiond
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mentiond
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mentioned
mentions
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, we may face serious problems. In conclusion,
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 there are advantages
for
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to
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 hiring
peaople
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people
 to do
houseworks
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housework
 and as babysitters, including
save
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time
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 to do other important
jobs
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 and
help
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helping
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 the number of people who need
such
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works
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work
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 to earn
money
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,
ones
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 should do
such
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works
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 as much as they can, to prevent promoting lazyness and save
money
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 for emergency situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment opportunities
  • Economic contribution
  • Specialization
  • Efficiency
  • Work-life balance
  • Productivity
  • Leisure time
  • Stress reduction
  • Quality of work
  • Trained professionals
  • Dependency
  • Life skills
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Accomplishment
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