It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children. Is this a good way of providing work for others? Should people do these things themselves?

There is the possibility to hire someone to do some
works
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we do not have
time
to do including housework or
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care of our baby. I believe,
while
people should do their
works
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as much as possible,
this
is a good
way
to provide a
part
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part-time
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time
job for others for two
compeling
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compelling
reasons. The first reason is, by acting
this
way
we save
time
for other tasks and
jobs
. If we have a tight deadline for a job,
this
would be a wise
way
to have more
time
to concentrate
to
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our project.
For example
,
last
month I had a project with
one week
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deadline and I
hire
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an individual to cook for me during the week. She was happy with the payment and I finished my project on
time
. The second reason is that
this
is a good
way
for those who
they
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are not allowed to have
full
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time
jobes
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jobs
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like students from other countries. By providing
such
part
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part-time
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time
jobs
they can earn some
money
that they need to spend
for
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accomodation
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accommodation
or food.
A research
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by Harvard University,
reviels
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reveals
that 30% of
student
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students
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are dependent on these types of
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to
spend
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their bills and help them
in
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financial problems. People should do
such
duties as much as they can by themselves because if they do
this
all the
time
they promote
lazyness
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laziness
in society. Another problem that can
accure
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occur
accrue
is that if they spend their
money
for
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jobs
they can do by
themeselves
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themselves
regularly , they miss the chance to pay for services which are essential during the month.
For example
, sometimes we need to pay for health care services and if we
had
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spent our
money
for
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on
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the mentiond
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mentiond
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mentioned
mentions
works
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, we may face serious problems. In conclusion,
while
there are advantages
for
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hiring
peaople
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people
to do
houseworks
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housework
and as babysitters, including
save
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time
to do other important
jobs
and
help
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helping
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the number of people who need
such
works
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work
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to earn
money
,
ones
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should do
such
works
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as much as they can, to prevent promoting lazyness and save
money
for emergency situations.
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