The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom . To what extent do you agree?

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Computers
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nowadays have become a basic necessity of life .
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The computer
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system is widely used in
education
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the education
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system to teach
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in a more effective way. Some experts suggest that teachers could be replaced with
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in
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as they
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do not
have much importance in classrooms. I personally do not favour the given statement as human intelligence is
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irreplaceable
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. First of all ,a human presence is most important to operate it in an effective way . It can not control the
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which
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to be taught to
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which creates the need
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a
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.
internet
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has so much which could be bad for small kids to see so a
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can help to eliminate
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from the class.
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while
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studying reproduction
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in lower classes a
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knows what
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are not suppose
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are not supposed
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to see in
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age where AI could be
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impossible
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to
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it
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,
computer
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computers
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can not beat
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the human
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brain in creativity.
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can process the only
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that
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is
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provided to
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through human research. The subjects which
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demands
demand
creativity and research only a human
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can help the
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Moreover
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the motivation to study and
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discipline
to study are some
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that can only come with a human
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.some
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find it difficult to concentrate when
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are taught using a video as it could be fast going for some who are not that intelligent where a
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could
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reach
at level of all
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of class and make learning easy.
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, teachers
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be replaced with
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as
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are only made to help
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learn better but
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the
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who is
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responsible
for what
students
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should learn.
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Work on improving your sentence structure for better clarity. Some sentences are a bit long and could be broken down for easier understanding.
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Include more varied and specific examples to strengthen your argument. Currently, there are just one or two examples which might not be enough to convincingly support your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which nicely frames your argument.
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You've addressed the task with relevant points discussing both the role of computers and teachers.
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Good use of vocabulary related to education and technology demonstrates understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Self-paced learning
  • Personalized education
  • Student-centered learning
  • Interactive tools
  • Blended learning
  • Facilitator
  • Critical thinking
  • Soft skills
  • Empathy
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Mentorship
  • Teacher-student relationship
  • Practical experience
  • Real-world insights
  • Standardization of education
  • Individual student needs
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