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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart presents the number of citizens from 5 European nationalities residing in each other's countries in the year 2011. The column of the table shows the amount of people living in the different countries and the rows represent the countries where they are living .
Overall
,
Germany
 has the highest number of immigrants totalling 1,198,000 million
while
 Poland has the lowest with only a total of 6000.
Conversely
, Poland has the highest count for emigrants reaching a total of 1,168,000 million and Spain has the least with only 202,107 thousand. In
Germany
, most of its immigrants are from Italy
while
 most of its residents emigrate to Britain.
Similarly
, Polish resident's chosen country for immigration is
also
 Britain.
Although
, most of its migrants are from
Germany
. British people's top country for immigrating is Spain
while
Germany
 is more popular among Spanish citizens.
Moreover
, residents of Italy are high in numbers in Poland and are low in
Germany
. Britain
however
 has the least numbers for both nationalities.
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