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The following chart shows the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to housing preferences of UK people.

The following chart shows the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to housing preferences of UK people.
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The bar chart provides data on the percentage of residents in
Liverpool
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,
London
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, and
Manchester
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 who preferred four types of housing—apartments, terraced
houses
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, detached
houses
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, and semi-detached
houses
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—in 2009.
Overall
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,
Liverpool
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 residents showed a clear
preference
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 for apartments,
whereas
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 semi-detached
houses
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 were the most popular in both
London
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 and
Manchester
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.
In contrast
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, terraced
houses
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 were the least favoured type of housing across all three cities. The proportion of people preferring apartments in
Liverpool
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 was significantly higher than in the other cities, reaching nearly 60%. Meanwhile,
London
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 had only about half of that percentage, at 30%,
while
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Manchester
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's
preference
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 was even lower, at just one-third of
Liverpool
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’s figure. Terraced
houses
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 had relatively similar
preference
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 rates in
Liverpool
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 and
Manchester
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, with
Liverpool
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 at close to 10% and
Manchester
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just
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 over 10%,
while
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London
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 had a higher percentage, nearing 20%. These figures indicate only minor differences in
preference
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 rates for terraced
houses
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 in all three cities. For detached
houses
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, approximately 35% of
London
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 residents preferred
this
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 type of housing, compared to 20% in
Manchester
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 and 15% in
Liverpool
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. Regarding semi-detached
houses
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, the
preference
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 rates were similar in
London
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 and
Manchester
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, both at roughly 40%,
whereas
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Liverpool
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 had a significantly lower proportion, at just 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, london, manchester, houses, preference with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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