Some people say that technological gadgets like smart phones have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that they have made life more complex and stressful. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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various gadgets, the lives of
the
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people have changed over the period of
time
. From telephones to smartphones and other devices which are giving more comfort than ever before.
Whereas
other
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others
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consider that
this
advancement has actually made the livelihood a
lot
more difficult and stressful. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will try to discuss both views with my opinion later.
Firstly
, the beginning of the advanced devices caught the eye of
lot
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of people all around the
world
.
Hence
, numerous individuals can be seen spending
plethora
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of
time
on these.
Moreover
,
smart phones
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are connecting different
communties
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communities
,
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and religion
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religion
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religions
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from all around the
world
not just for getting to know but for
work
purposes too.
For instance
, residents of India can
work
for America and can earn lump sum money.
Moreover
, there are no worries of getting out of
house
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the house
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, waiting for buses and spending your
time
moving to and from
work
as smart laptops and computers give access to
work
from home which actually adds comfort and easiness to life.
Secondly
, there are opponents who believe these things have taken away calmness and simplicity. Since mass can be seen getting stuck into things like games, social media apps and
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which
is suppose
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to be very dangerous.
For instance
, I see numerous
individual
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individuals
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put a
lot
of
time
on
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these gadgets and can be seen
so
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as
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anxious all the
time
.
Such
the
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mental health is deteriorating swiftly since there is no physical interaction
to
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the
world
.
To conclude
, I have
opinion
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the opinion
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that appliances are not just giving everything for free but
also
taking a
lot
of things from humankind. Maybe it is quite difficult to understand loopholes at present
however
soon in
future
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the future
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world
will face these and
would
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not have
anyother
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any other
option than to bear it.
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introduction advice
The introductory paragraph provides a clear outline of what will be discussed, but it could be more concise. Aim to clearly present both views without repetition to establish a strong foundation for the essay.
main body advice
In the main sections, ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main point supported by adequate examples. There are instances where ideas could be more thoroughly developed or supported with more specific examples.
conclusion advice
The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay's content, presenting a clear opinion. To enhance impact, try to include a summary of the key points discussed.
balance highlight
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both perspectives, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
example usage highlight
The use of examples in explaining the impact of technology on daily life is evident, which helps in illustrating the points.

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