The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The bar chart illustrates what ages in 1000
adolescents
of a survey believed criminal
responsibilities
,
marrige
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marriage
and voting
right
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rights
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have
permited
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permitted
to
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apply
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younger in five
countries
,including the USA,the UK,
Mexico
,Japan and Egypt.
Overall
,as we can observe apparently the chart,
Japan
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Japanese
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young
people
accept more highest
age
in three rights than younger in every
countries
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country
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.
All off
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In all
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six
countries
,
adolescents
in
Mexico
that
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apply
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they
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apply
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think young
people
can process rights and
responsibilities
under 18
years
old. To
the
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apply
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begin with,in Japan,younger think to need the highest
age
to have
marriage
right
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rights
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,about 22
years
old,and voting
right
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rights
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also
has
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have
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the highest
years
compare
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compared
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other
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to other
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countries
about 20
years
old.Meanwhile,the USA young
people
believe that
adolescents
allow 12
years
old to have criminal
responsibilities
less ages than
other
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the other
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five
countries
,
also
USA
younger have
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has
show examples
the same thinking over
marriage
and voting should be 18
years
old.
In addition
,the UK has second rank in
marriage
age
,the figures saw
adolescents
are granted to young
people
in
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apply
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voting and criminal
responsibilities
are both the same data in the UK and
Mexico
(respectively 16 and 17
years
old).
Moreover
,young
people
in
Mexico
and Egypt,
also
have
same
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the same
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age
in
marriage
right
over 16
years
old.
Nonetheless
,Japanese
adolescents
believe that criminal
responsibilities
and Epypt young
people
in
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apply
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voting think the same
age
to allow,about 18
years
old.Young
people
in Egypt think
adolescents
commit
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who commit
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a crime have to abide by
responsble
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responsibility
in
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at
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14
years
old.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adolescents, responsibilities, right, countries, mexico, people, age, years, marriage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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