The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph below demonstrates the total revenue of pharmaceutical companies in terms of
percentage
in three different continents .Over a
four year
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period,
Asia
noted a significant
percentage
increase
in
the
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total income,
while
on the other
hand
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America recorded a noticeable decrease throughout the years,
additionally
,
Asia
maintained the growth with a slight change. From 2002
till
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to
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2004,
Asia
maintained a fixed
increase
,
5
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of 5
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% of revenue growth annually,
moreover
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moreover,
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Europe had a slight
percentage
increase
by
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of
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1
percent
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per cent
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to 3
percent
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per cent
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, relatively.
Also
, America recorded a visible decrease from 41% in 2002 to 27% in the year 2006, it had been the lowest
percentage
among them. Looking at the chart During the period of 2004 till 2006,
Asia
documented a 5% revenue
increase
, it
had seen
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the largest
percentage
among all regions,
while
Europe
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Europe's
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sales
percentage
dropped by 8% and America recorded a steady
increase
of about 1 to 2
percent
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per cent
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.
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