The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph below demonstrates the total revenue of pharmaceutical companies in terms of
percentage
in three different continents .Over a four year
period, Add a hyphen
four-year
Asia
noted a significant percentage
increase
in the
total income, Correct article usage
apply
while
on the other
hand
America recorded a noticeable decrease throughout the years, Add a comma
hand,
additionally
, Asia
maintained the growth with a slight change.
From 2002 till
2004, Change preposition
to
Asia
maintained a fixed increase
, 5
% of revenue growth annually, Change preposition
of 5
moreover
Europe had a slight Add a comma
moreover,
percentage
increase
by
1 Change preposition
of
percent
to 3 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, relatively. Change the spelling
per cent
Also
, America recorded a visible decrease from 41% in 2002 to 27% in the year 2006, it had been the lowest percentage
among them.
Looking at the chart During the period of 2004 till 2006, Asia
documented a 5% revenue increase
, it had seen
the largest Wrong verb form
saw
percentage
among all regions, while
Europe
sales Change noun form
Europe's
percentage
dropped by 8% and America recorded a steady increase
of about 1 to 2 percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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