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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The given library map displays the renovation that took place from 2001
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 2009. The map illustrates the transformation of the library’s ground floor over 8 years, showing a diverse collection of book sections and modern amenities. In 2001 the library was divided into four main sections, fiction books
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 located on the top, on the left of the entrance, there
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 the self-help and history books and
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 the newspaper and periodicals. The central area featured eight tables for reading and studying. By 2009, significant changes took place, the history book section was replaced from the top left of the librarian’s desk to be directly on its left side, in order to allow three new
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 sections which are kitchen, economics and law.
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 the fiction was replaced from the top side to be directly beside the history section. Noteworthy, the eight tables were replaced by four long tables to accommodate more space.
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 there were two new computers in front of the stairs.
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Try to maintain consistency in verb tenses to ensure clarity.
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Consider adding a conclusion for a more rounded finish to your essay.
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Explain the significance of changes, such as the addition of new book sections, to show their impact on the library's functionality.
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The essay provides a clear before-and-after description of the library layout, helping the reader visualize changes.
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Efforts to include specific details, like book sections and table arrangements, enhance understanding.

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