The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map indicates a proposed plan for a new
city
. The plan contains the housing
areas
, the main and ring roads, the industrial
areas
, bus stands, the parking sites, and the recreational places.
According to
the map, the proposed
city
will structured into and outside of a
circle
which will be attached together by a ring road. Most of the recreational
areas
, all the parking lines, one-third of housing
areas
and all bus stands are in the
circle
. The industrial
areas
, one recreational area and two-thirds of the housing area will be located outside of the
circle
. There are several housing
areas
, most of which are in the west of the
city
, and all of them have great access to the main roads. Three creational
areas
are in the southwest near the parking line. Another one is under the others but outside of the
circle
. The bus stands and parking lines will be attached to the other parts by four main roads.
Additionally
, the industrial
areas
are almost in the outside of the
city
. One of them is in the southeast and the other is in the northwest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, areas, circle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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