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Question：more students study abroad to learn new things today do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages？ is it positive or negative？ agree or disagree to what extent do you agree or disagree？

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 era of state of art where
people
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 live in a global village owing to the advancement of technology and
numerous
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a numerous
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number of
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apply
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students
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 are going to overseas for
persing
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pursuing
 their higher education. I agree that
this
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 is
the
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a
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 positive development where advantages are
supassed
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surpassed
than
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by
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 its disadvantages.
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 number of
students
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are
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is
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 going
to
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abroad
fo
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for
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acheving
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achieving
 their higher degree.
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, they are enable to learn different lessons which will
be help
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 them in
carrer develepment
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career development
 and
also
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the
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apply
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will
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contribute future progress of the
country
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 in various sectors.
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, in Bangladesh,
people
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 who are working as
a
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teacher
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teachers
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 are trying to achieve their Doctor of
Philosopy
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Philosophy
 (PhD)for their professional purposes. Again, a significant amount of
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this
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these
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people
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are
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select the USA for their PhD and at the same time the USA offers
better
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a better
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 scope in research
area
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areas
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.
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, when
people
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are
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return
their
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to their
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 own
country
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 they serve their
country
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 by contributing
in
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to
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 different research areas and
teach
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teaching
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 their
students
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. So they
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play
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 a crucial role in teaching and research areas.
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, many
students
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 want to go to developed
country
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 from development
country
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 to learn
application
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applications
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 in
cutting edge
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cutting-edge
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 technologies.
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, in that
country
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 , they have
been
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completed different vocational courses which help them in creating job sectors after return. To cite an example, the numerous number of
students
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 in
Banglades
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Bangladesh
, go to
china
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China
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 for different diploma courses which assist them in future
entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 and
the
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apply
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contribute in countries development by establishing
farm houses
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farmhouses
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.
To conclude
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,
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apply
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 abroad offers
students
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 to learn different new skills which help them in their personal
progressment
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progression
 and
also
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 give them an opportunity to their own
courtries
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countries
, so its advantages
outweiged
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outweighed
outweigh
 the dis advantages.

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Language
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and spelling. Small errors can sometimes confuse the reader. For example, check 'persing' instead of 'pursuing' and 'fo acheving' instead of 'for achieving'.
Ideas
Provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing. For instance, explaining how students apply new skills learned abroad in their home countries with specific cases might help.
Logical Structure
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main topic. While you discuss various aspects, tie them back to the essay question directly.
Task Achievement
You present a clear stance on the issue (agreeing that studying abroad is a positive development).
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay has a structured introduction and conclusion, making your argument clear from start to finish.
Supported Main Points
You provide relevant points about the benefits of studying abroad, such as career development, country contributions, and technological advancements.
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