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The speeding up of life in many areas such as travel and communication has negative effects on society at all levels- individual, national and global. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe that the introduction of technology and its modernization is a negative development at all levels, whether it is on the country level, at a world stage, or for humans. I disagree with their viewpoint. A number of arguments surround my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. The main reason why people think that it is not a positive at all is because whatever is happening technology-wise is beyond their wild expectations as it is occurring at
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 a pace that they need time to accept
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. There are many benefits of
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 advancement,
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 as time, and the difference is no barrier anymore because of the transportation. It has become easy to travel globally as in a matter of minutes, a person can be in another part of the world.
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, at the individual level, there are more choices, opportunities, and better job prospects
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introduction conclusion present
Extend your conclusion to summarize your main points and restate your stance clearly.
logical structure
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea with clear topic sentences.
complete response
You have started addressing multiple levels: individual and global, which is a good start for the task response.
relevant specific examples
You make a good point about how technology has made global travel easier.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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