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The map shows the village park, now and 10 years ago. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the village park, now and 10 years ago. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps depict the developments that have taken place in a village
park
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 over a period of a decade. It can be seen that radical changes have taken place over a period of 10 years. 10 years ago, the
park
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 was fairly simple, with
entrance
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an entrance
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 at the northwest corner. The football pitch was there in the centre of the
park
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, towards the north of which were two tennis courts and on the northwest, a car
park
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 to accommodate about 20 cars was there. A
children’s
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 play
area
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 was there on the northeast and towards the southeast were some woods and a pond. The second map shows that the
park
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 has undergone great changes in 10 years time. A cycle path has been made all around the periphery of the
park
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. The tennis courts have doubled and the car
park
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 has expanded to house about 50 cars. The
children’s
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 play
area
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 has not changed, but it has a soft
children’s
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 play
area
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 incorporated in the south. Toilets have been added towards the south of the
children’s
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area
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. The pond has been converted into a boating lake and the trees have been cut to make a café. A picnic
area
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 has been made on the southwest side.
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, the total
area
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 of the
park
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 is the same, but many things have been added and the functionality of the
park
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 has improved.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, children’s, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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