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Multinational companies are becoming increaseingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Write at least 250 words.

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In
countemporary
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contemporary
 society, multinational corporations are increasingly establishing a presence in developing nations.
While
 there are some drawbacks associated with the prevalence of multinational enterprises
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progressively increasing I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the
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 hand, a potential disadvantage of the wave of multinational
companies
 is the negative impact on the economic
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 of
origin
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 country. With
monopoly
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 of
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orgin
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origin
countries
' market by
the
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multinational
companies
 local businesses are failing in competition with that
powerfull
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powerful
companies
 which results in
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local
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 businesses.
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, in Mexico, the entry of large retail chains has led to the decline of small, local businesses that can not match the prices and variety offered by these MNCs. Another perceived negative is the
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 to
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explosion
exploitation
 of cheap
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 and natural resources.
This corporations
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 may use resources and regional workforce
unethicaly
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unethically
unethical
 and pay unfair wages for more profit.
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 some western big
companies
 have established their industries in China
due to
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its
cost effective
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 tax system and inexpensive
staff's
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 payment.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of
common
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 presence of multinational
companies
 in underdeveloped
countries
 is
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 development of that country
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 bringing advanced technology and providing
country
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 of
orgin
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origin
 with
enhansment
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enhancement
 of physical foundations like roads, ports and other essential facilities and
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 in training programs which
leading
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 to skill development and knowledge sharing. A future benefit
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 is that
contribution
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 of multinational
companies
 boosts underdeveloped
countries
' economic situation by creating employment possibilities which leads to an increase in income generation and wealth for
local
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 population.
For instance
, the founding of manufacturing plants by multinational
companies
 in
countries
 like Vietnam has significantly boosted local recruitment. On balance,
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precense
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presence
 of multinational
companies
 in developing
countries
 would seem disadvantageous under circumstances.
However
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 positive effects in terms of infrastructural development and
economy
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 growth override the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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