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Multinational companies are becoming increaseingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Write at least 250 words.

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In
countemporary
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 society, multinational corporations are increasingly establishing a presence in developing nations.
While
 there are some drawbacks associated with the prevalence of multinational enterprises
are
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progressively increasing I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the
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 hand, a potential disadvantage of the wave of multinational
companies
 is the negative impact on the economic
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 of
origin
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 country. With
monopoly
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 of
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orgin
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origin
countries
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the
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multinational
companies
 local businesses are failing in competition with that
powerfull
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powerful
companies
 which results in
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local
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 businesses.
For instance
, in Mexico, the entry of large retail chains has led to the decline of small, local businesses that can not match the prices and variety offered by these MNCs. Another perceived negative is the
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 to
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explosion
exploitation
 of cheap
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 and natural resources.
This corporations
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 may use resources and regional workforce
unethicaly
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unethically
unethical
 and pay unfair wages for more profit.
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 some western big
companies
 have established their industries in China
due to
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its
cost effective
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 tax system and inexpensive
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 payment.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of
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 presence of multinational
companies
 in underdeveloped
countries
 is
infrastructure
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 development of that country
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 bringing advanced technology and providing
country
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 of
orgin
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origin
 with
enhansment
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enhancement
 of physical foundations like roads, ports and other essential facilities and
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 in training programs which
leading
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 to skill development and knowledge sharing. A future benefit
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 is that
contribution
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 of multinational
companies
 boosts underdeveloped
countries
' economic situation by creating employment possibilities which leads to an increase in income generation and wealth for
local
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 population.
For instance
, the founding of manufacturing plants by multinational
companies
 in
countries
 like Vietnam has significantly boosted local recruitment. On balance,
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precense
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presence
 of multinational
companies
 in developing
countries
 would seem disadvantageous under circumstances.
However
, in my view,
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 positive effects in terms of infrastructural development and
economy
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 growth override the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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