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69.The line chart below shows the percentage of popualtion aged under 5 years old and aged 65 years old or above in the world since 1950 with projection until 2040. The table below shows the projection of the percentage of population aged 65 and above in 2030 and 2040 in different regions. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

69.The line chart below shows the percentage of popualtion aged under 5 years old and aged 65 years old or above in the world since 1950 with projection until 2040. The table below shows the projection of the percentage of population aged 65 and above in 2030 and 2040 in different regions. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart provided depicts the variation of
population
 comprehended by people above 65 years old
among
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in
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USA
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the USA
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,
Sweden
 and
Japan
 from 1950 to 2040, projecting the figures towards the foreseeable
period
. At first glance,
it is clear that
 an upward trend is illustrated in either
countries
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country
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. There has been a variation in the country with the elderly
population
 throughout the years. The increase in
population
 over 65 years old is noticeable, surging from about 5%, 7% and 9% to over 26%, 25% and 24% in
Japan
,
Sweden
 and
USA
, respectively.
Japan
 sharply rose in
population
 towards the end of the
period
, jumping from 10% in 2025 to 25% in 2035.
In contrast
, the steady surge in
Sweden
 and
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 was not that pronounced. By the end of the
period
,
USA
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the USA
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 occupied the rank with the higher elder
population
. Before 2000,
Sweden
 surpassed
USA
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the USA
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. Meanwhile,
Japan
 overtook both of them towards the end of the
period
.
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