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Line graph gives information about the comparison of the production and the consumption of rice in one country and bar chart given information about the comparison of rice and other food crops consume

Line graph gives information about the comparison of the production and the consumption of rice in one country and bar chart given information about the comparison of rice and other food crops consume
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The line graph illustrates how much
rice
 was and will be produced and consumed in a particular country in 5 decades starting from 1990,
while
 the bar chart demonstrates the difference between
rice
 and other food
crops
consumption
 within the same given period. It is,
overall
, apparent that both production and
consumption
rice
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of rice
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is
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are
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 predicted to increase in
50-year
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a 50-year
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 period. Meanwhile,
rice
consumption
 witnessed a noticeable upward trend, but is going to decline,
whereas
this
 is the reverse when it comes to other food
crops
. Looking at the line graph
first,
25
million
 and slightly less than 40
million
 tons of
rice
 were generated and consumed in 1990, respectively. The figure for
the
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rice
consumption
 experienced no change until 2020, yet, the figure is expected to go up dramatically to more than 60
million
 tons by 2040. As for its production, its indication has been growing noticeably since the initial year, starting to fully cover
rice
 demands in 2015. By 2040,
rice
producti
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production
product
 is likely to reach 75
million
 tons. As far as
bar
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the bar
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 chart is concerned,
rice
consumption
 and other
crops
 constituted less and more than 50%, proportionally. Interestingly, when the
consumption
 of
rice
 increased, that of other
crops
 fell, and vice versa. The
rice
consumption
 rose gradually, yet, considerably until 2020, comprising roughly 90% ,
while
 the percentage of other food
crops
 consumed decreased to about 10% in 2020. By 2040,
this
 huge gap is going to disappear,
equilizing
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equalizing
 to 50/50.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, crops, consumption, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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