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Line graph gives information about the comparison of the production and the consumption of rice in one country and bar chart given information about the comparison of rice and other food crops consume

Line graph gives information about the comparison of the production and the consumption of rice in one country and bar chart given information about the comparison of rice and other food crops consume
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The line graph illustrates how much
rice
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 was and will be produced and consumed in a particular country in 5 decades starting from 1990,
while
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 the bar chart demonstrates the difference between
rice
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 and other food
crops
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consumption
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 within the same given period. It is,
overall
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, apparent that both production and
consumption
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rice
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of rice
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is
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are
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 predicted to increase in
50-year
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a 50-year
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 period. Meanwhile,
rice
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consumption
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 witnessed a noticeable upward trend, but is going to decline,
whereas
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this
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 is the reverse when it comes to other food
crops
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. Looking at the line graph
first,
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25
million
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 and slightly less than 40
million
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 tons of
rice
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 were generated and consumed in 1990, respectively. The figure for
the
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rice
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consumption
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 experienced no change until 2020, yet, the figure is expected to go up dramatically to more than 60
million
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 tons by 2040. As for its production, its indication has been growing noticeably since the initial year, starting to fully cover
rice
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 demands in 2015. By 2040,
rice
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producti
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production
product
 is likely to reach 75
million
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 tons. As far as
bar
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the bar
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 chart is concerned,
rice
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consumption
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 and other
crops
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 constituted less and more than 50%, proportionally. Interestingly, when the
consumption
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 of
rice
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 increased, that of other
crops
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 fell, and vice versa. The
rice
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consumption
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 rose gradually, yet, considerably until 2020, comprising roughly 90% ,
while
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 the percentage of other food
crops
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 consumed decreased to about 10% in 2020. By 2040,
this
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 huge gap is going to disappear,
equilizing
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equalizing
 to 50/50.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, crops, consumption, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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