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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the most repeated negative and positive feedbacks of visitors who travel to Bowen Island. The highest percentage of dissatisfaction belongs to living fees,
while
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travelers
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 have had the highest rate of desirable communication with local people. Almost half of
negative
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the negative
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 comments are
in
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related to costs. The second one, which is a quarter of the pie, has been caused
as a result
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 of
lack
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a lack
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 of
entertaining
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entertainment
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 facilities and activities. Low-quality dishes and the weather issues
has
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 raised considerable concerns
to
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too
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, which together add up to 25
percent
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 of dissatisfied votes. Local citizens and the scenery have had a significant impact on travelers
that
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lead
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almost
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 80 percentage of satisfaction rate. Accommodating facilities and the island's culture are
also
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 inspiring for more than one-fifth of voters.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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