The graph shows the income of four cafés in New York over last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the income of four

cafés in New York over last year.

Summarize the information by selecting

and reporting the main features.

Make comparisons where relevant
This
line
charts
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depicts cafes in
new york
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New York
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in the
last
year and
chanages
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changes
and
differents
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differences
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. It is clear from the graph that the tea room was 160 per
cent
was wave until decrease to 50.
Comparsion
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Comparison
, cafe cool was 30 per
cent
and
increase
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to 120 it is benefit
develoments
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developments
.
According to
what is shown,
Firstly
, Internet
experess
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express
was an
increase
per
cent
mildly from 100 to decrease until growth to 140.
Secondly
, WiFi Cafe has 50 and
increase
wave to 100 figure and plummet
agine
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again
to 60 per
cent
trend
at the end
has an
increase
it
is fluctuate
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proportion and so very swiftly to 190
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
, New York
it
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apply
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is
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an
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overcrowded state.
To sum up
, we could say that has many
different
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from the J to D few
last
year
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years
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in the cafe
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in new
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new york
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New York
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income trends
  • Monthly income
  • Seasonal variations
  • Peak month
  • Decline in income
  • Annual income figures
  • Profitable
  • Extraordinary events
  • Sudden spikes/declines
  • External factors
  • Performance comparison
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