The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie charts highlight data about the research results in one African country which show the teenagers’ key points for taking mobile phones from 2016 to 2019.
Overall
, teenagers
used
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it to send emails, make phone calls, work with digital
camera
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and be
in
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social networks. The main reason was
online
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community and the least important cause was buzz calls. As it is illustrated in the charts, young people weren't interested in talking with somebody and preferred emails and social media. These points took approximately three quarters in
this
period of time.
However
,
popularity
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of networks was almost twice as large as messages.
For example
, in 2017 percentages related to each other like 24% to 48%.
Moreover
, the vogue of calls halved. It changed from 10% to 5%.
On the other hand
, people started to take
photo
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photos
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more often. The number of votes increased to 20% in 2019. Making pictures and writing emails had almost the same number of
percentagesand
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percentages and
percentages
there were 20% and 19%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noticeable shift
  • communication preferences
  • considerably declined
  • functionalities
  • reflecting global trends
  • emerging trend
  • educational use of technology
  • diversification
  • traditional communication
  • digital forms of communication
  • instant messaging
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