The table below shows the kinds of second languages Korean students learned and the line graph describes how many Korean students went overseas to study between 1980 and 2005.

The table below shows the kinds of second languages Korean students learned and the line graph describes how many Korean students went overseas to study between 1980 and 2005.
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There are two figures that display
Korean
students
' behaviours.
Firstly
,The table chart illustrates the proportion of languages which
students
learned as a second language from 1980 to 2005.
Secondly
,the line graph presents the
number
of
Korean
students
who went to study abroad between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
it can be seen that English was the most selected language in all the periods given and In that period,
Korean
students
went overseas at an increasing rate in all countries.
To begin
with,All of the
Korean
students
studied English as their second language but the second place was between Japanese and Chinese.
That is
to say,The percentage of Chinese chosen gradually rose up from 5% to reach a peak at 26% in 2005
while
, the Japanese had a more fluctuating trend starting with 12% of
students
and
then
increased
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exponentially to peak at 30% in 1990 but after that
year
, the percentage levelled off to the same
number
as the beginning.
Additionally
,French and others had a small minority accounting for around 10% throughout those years. Moving on to the line graph,In the first five-
year
period,Only less than 40
thousand
students
went overseas.
However
,after the
year
1985,the
number
of
students
studying in America grew exponentially to 120
thousand
in 1995 and
then
remained constant.
Korean
students
also
went to China at a gradually increased rate from 20 to 50
thousand
in 2000.Japan became a more popular destination because the
number
climbed up significantly after the
year
1990 to reach a stagnant point in the
year
1995.
Finally
,others had some degree of level up in the same
year
as Japan which was around 10
thousand
to 20
thousand
in the
year
1995.
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