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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows three different planned sites for a new supermarket in the city of Ellington with a population of 120,000. It is obvious that these sites are totally far away from each other.
While
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 A is in the residential
area
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, B and
C
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 are in the countryside. Located near the traffic-free zone, A is
also
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 close to the industrial
area
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, with a railway passing under it.
In addition
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,
C
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 shares the same features as A, it is adjacent to the other industrial zone, and the railway is
also
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 situated close to the proposed site
C
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.
Besides
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, there is a park which is in the residential
area
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, next to
C
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.
Moreover
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, there is an airport which is adjacent to either A and
C
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.
On the other hand
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, B is far from the industrial
area
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 and the railway, even the airport. The only infrastructure near B is a motorway which is on the left side .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population density
  • foot traffic
  • residential area
  • commercial area
  • outskirts
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • commuting
  • accessible
  • proposed sites
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