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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line
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graph
 compares the proportion of households who own cars in the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 from 1971 to 2007. It is apparent that the percentage of
ownerships
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ownership
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in
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using one car was the highest type
although
 it had gradual fluctuation,
while
 families with three or more vehicles seem to have the lowest usage in
this
 allocated period.
According to
 the
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graph
, the proportion of families with one car was higher than other types in all years. It
exprerienced
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experienced
 a
gradually
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 fluctuation which ended
with
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at
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apporoximately
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approximately
 45 per
cent
 in the whole period. Whilst the percentage of
owenrships
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ownership
ownerships
 with three or more cars had a slight rise, it had the lowest trend in
this
 assigned period, starting from roughly 2 per
cent
 in 1971 to just under 10 per
cent
 in 2007. Regarding people with no car, there was
an
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 downward trend which was rather 50 per
cent
 in 1971 which
followed
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was followed
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 by a dramatic decline to reach almost 25 per
cent
 in 2007. The figures
of
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for
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british
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British
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 people with two vehicles per household
are
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shown
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 that it
stated
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started
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 from just below 10 per
cent
 in 1971 which saw a substantial increase roughly as twice as that of 2007.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • stable
  • percentage
  • significant decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • growth rate
  • category
  • notable
  • analyze
  • ownership
  • comparative analysis
  • general trend
  • highlight
  • focus on
  • comparison
  • significant change
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