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many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there are so many ways to learn or study, with the growth of technology people can gain knowledge not only from offline but
also
 from online.
However
, others think that studying online might not get the same benefits as attending
school
, college or university.
Although
 many institutions still use online programs to provide knowledge, I do think studying offline is still the best way.
Firstly
, attending
school
 is more effective for communicating and learning the subject with no additional cost.
For instance
, during COVID-19 in 2020 all of the
students
 at any level applied to
school
 from home, they did an online class.
In contrast
, not all
students
 have the tools to access online classes, it was hard for the family, especially for those who lived in a suburban area as they needed to provide a laptop and
also
 the internet.
Secondly
,
students
 are required to finish their tasks online and many families experience difficulties.
For instance
,
also
 during
covid
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 in 2020
students
 in an elementary
school
 received their tasks online and it required a lot of work. The parents need to print out the paper
,
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 and help their children finish the homework
also
 they need to scan and send it back to the teachers. During that phase, many parents complained and felt stressed.
To conclude
, I believe studying online will not get the same benefits as attending
school
, college or university since it is not effective.
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task achievement
Provide a clearer stance in the introduction. While you mention online programs and attending schools, clarify whether you agree or disagree and to what extent.
coherence cohesion
Enhance logical structuring by clearly linking each paragraph with transition phrases or sentences to demonstrate the progression of your argument.
task achievement
Expand on the advantages of online learning briefly to provide a balanced view, addressing both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a structured introduction and a conclusion summarizing your viewpoint, which helps in maintaining clarity.
task achievement
Relevant examples, particularly your references to the COVID-19 situation, effectively illustrate the challenges faced by students and families during online learning.
coherence cohesion
The overall flow of the essay maintains cohesion, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

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