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The bar chart shows information about the post-school educational plans of GENERATION respondents by gender. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the post-school educational plans of GENERATION respondents by gender. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 chart shows the post-school educational plans of
respondents
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 by gender, covering three options: Higher
Education
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, Vocational Training, and No Plan to Study
Further
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. Key Features: 1. **Higher
Education
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**: Across all gender groups, Higher
Education
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 is the most popular choice. Both male and
non-binary
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respondents
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 have particularly high proportions choosing
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 path. 2. **Vocational Training**: Male
respondents
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 show a notably higher percentage in Vocational Training compared to female and
non-binary
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respondents
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. 3. **No Plan to Study
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**:
This
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 option has the lowest proportion across all groups, with male
respondents
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 having the smallest percentage,
while
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 female and
non-binary
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 groups have slightly higher, though still relatively low, proportions. Comparison: - Both male and
non-binary
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respondents
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 prioritize Higher
Education
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similarly
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, showing a higher inclination towards
further
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 studies compared to the female group. - Females appear to be more evenly distributed across the options,
although
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 they still favor Higher
Education
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 over the other two choices. -
Non-binary
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respondents
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 show a relatively low interest in Vocational Training,
while
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 the male group is more likely to choose
this
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 option.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words respondents, education, non-binary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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