The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustate
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illustrate
the world sharing projected production and exports of four nations
during
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1985 to 2005.
Overall
, the
world
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projected production has 6 sectors (services, manufacturing,
materials
, energy,
agriculture
, and info-com tech. The largest
porprotion
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proportion
portion
is services in both 2040 and 2060.
In contrast
, the smallest
porprotion
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proportion
portion
is
materials
in 2040.
Similarly
,
agriculture
has the smallest ratio in 2060.
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the one hand, in 2040, the biggest ratio is services, which make up
at
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around 40%. The second largest
ration
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ratio
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is manufacturing, which
remain
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at about 31%. Info-Com Tech comprised at 15%.
Moreover
, the proportion of
materials
,
agriculture
, and energy stay at 3%, 4%, and 7% respectively.
On the other hand
, in 2060, the proportion of
sevices
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services
and manufacturing increase minimally.
Sevices
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increase
about
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1% and manufacturing rises
approximately
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2% from the previous 20 years.
Similarly
, info-com-tech
step
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up
about
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1% and
materials
expand
approximately
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1%.
However
, the
quanity
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quantity
quality
of
agriculture
and energy
drop
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at
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around 3% and 1%.
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