The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate the planned future changes of the industrial area in the town of Norbiton.
To begin
, the roundabout in
todays
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Norbiton industrial area has only two exits
whereas
, the roundabout in the planned future development has 4 exits.
In addition
, it is planned to build a bridge across the river.
Moreover
, utilities
such
as
school
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schools
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, medical
centre
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centres
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, shops, and
playground
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playgrounds
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are planned to build.
Finally
, all the factories are replaced by
housings
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housing
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.
Firstly
, the roundabout remains in the same place. The roundabout is now surrounded by factories
however
, it is planned to be surrounded by
housings
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housing
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,
medical
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a medical
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centre, and shops. The playground and school are going to be
bulid
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built
in the east.
To sum up
,
main
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the main
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changes are
buliding
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building
new utilities and
housings
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housing
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, making it more suitable for
human
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humans
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to live in.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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