Thesedays, problems with pollution are becoming worse, particularly in large cities. What are the reasons for this and how can this be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the
poluttion
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pollution
has become a serious crisis
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in
metropolices
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metropolises
metropolis
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problem, and
ultimatelly
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ultimately
suggest solutions.
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, one of the significant contributory factors is
a
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growing use of
vehicles
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, leading to
carbon
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dioxide
emission
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emissions
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.
Growth
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The growth
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of
population
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the population
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in large
cities
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has led to
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increas
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increase
in demand for transportation and
vehicles
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.
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leads people to use more
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cars;
consequently
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, realising more
carbon
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dioxide from the
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engines
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of cars.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, industrialization has caused
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the building
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many
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factories
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near the
cities
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. Industrial
pollution
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has
been
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increased in
larg
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large
cities
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the rise in
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a number
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of
factories
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and plants near
metropolices
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metropolises
metropolis
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, in Iran, Khozestan, some plants are located close to the
cities
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and citizens are exposed to their
pollution
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.
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, to tackle the problem of
carbon
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emision
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emission
emissions
and
reduse
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reduce
carbon
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footprint,
governments
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should develop public transportation in order to decline the number of
privat
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private
vehicles
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. A well-organised public transportation can persuade many people to use it
instead
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of wasting their time in traffic jams;
thus
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, the
carbon
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dioxide emitted from privet cars will
cut
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down.
In addition
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,
governments
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sould
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should
could
relocate the
factories
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and plants, constructing near the
cities
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. Reconstructing industries
realising
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and realising
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toxic gasses contributes to
reduction
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a reduction
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in
pollution
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of
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in
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larg
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large
cities
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.
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, the
governments
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can allocate a remote area to industries, and relocate all the
plant
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plants
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an
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and
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factories
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in
this
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area. In conclusion, the
pollution
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has been increasing in large-scale
cities
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. Overuse of private
vehicles
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and industrialization have contributed
in
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to
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this
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issue. To address the problem, the
governments
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should develop
public
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a public
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transmite
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transit
system and relocate industries somewhere away from
cities
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution
  • urbanization
  • green spaces
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • exhaust gases
  • emissions
  • waste management
  • air quality
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