The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The graph displays the proportions of males and females in different age groups who exercised in 2010.
Overall
, women in every group of age did more exercise than men except the group of 15 to 24 and 65-and-over groups. Only men between 15 and 24
years
old did more physical activity than women. Women aged 35 to 44, 45 to 54, and 55 to 65
years
had the highest proportion of females just over 50%. Ladies between 15 and 24, 25 and 34, and 65 and over had a lower percentage, just over 45%. Men aged 15 to 24
years
had the highest percentage at just over 50%, followed by the groups aged 25 to 34, 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and 65 and over at just over 40%. The group of guys into 35 to 34
years
old had the lowest proportion of physical activity at just under 40%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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