In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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has sparked much debate. Some people
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any city.
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in favour of the latter view
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Clarify your main points and arguments. Expand on why you favor improving existing public transport over constructing new railway lines, and provide specific reasoning or examples.
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Work on the logical flow between sentences and ideas. Ensure each sentence smoothly connects to the next and that the overall argument is easy to follow.
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Ensure the introductory sentence clearly outlines the topic and your stance. Begin with a concise explanation of both views before stating your opinion.
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Provide a conclusion to wrap up your essay. Summarize your main points and restate your opinion to strengthen your argument.
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The essay introduces both perspectives on the issue of spending on new railway lines versus existing public transport, which demonstrates an awareness of the debate.
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The essay briefly states the writer's opinion, indicating a clear personal stance on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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