The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the number of male and female gym
memberships
between 1980 and 2010, a period
of 30 years
. Overall
, women
’s memberships
have increased and men
’s have been very inconsistent but decreased over the period
.
In 1980, men
had two times more memberships
than women
and even though women
reached 2000 units in 1985 men
still had double that. However
, in 1993 women
overtook men
and reached its all time
high in 1995 of almost 3000 Add a hyphen
all-time
memberships
, whereas
men
had only 1700 that year. With a slight decrease in women
’s memberships
in 2000 men
overtook them and rocketed to their all time
high of 5000 Add a hyphen
all-time
memberships
in one year. That did not stay for long, when the males had a downward tendency for 5 following years
decreasing to less than a
1000 Correct article usage
apply
memberships
a year and women
stayed consistent having between 2000 and 2500 throughout those five years
.
In sharp contrast to this
, men
had more memberships
over a period
of 30 years
than women
, even though the men
's chart was very bumpy. Most of the time during the period
women
’s memberships number
varied from about 2000 to 3000, Fix the agreement mistake
membership numbers
whereas
men
’s has
Verb problem
apply
upsurge
two times to big highs and plunged two times to big lows.Wrong verb form
upsurged
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