The table shows proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table shows proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
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The given table represents the percentage of income of
adults
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and
children
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spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
Overall
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, the highest share of food expenditure was made by women , and the second place is taken by
adults
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and
then
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the rest. And the highest proportion of
money
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on electronic equipment was spent by
children
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because they liked new devices and the second place is taken by boys 18% and
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the rest. For music
adults
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, men and women spent the same 5% amount of
money
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, but others spent much more
money
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for example
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children
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spent 39%, boys spent 38% and girls spent 40% proportion of their
money
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on music. And for videos
adults
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, men and women spent a little bit of
money
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but others spent more
money
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than these three,
for example
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,
children
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spent 12% of the
money
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, boys spent 18% of their
money
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and girls spent 17% of the
money
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only the videos

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, children, money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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