The table shows proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table shows proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
The given table represents the percentage of income of
adults
and
children
spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
Overall
, the highest share of food expenditure was made by women , and the second place is taken by
adults
and
then
the rest. And the highest proportion of
money
on electronic equipment was spent by
children
because they liked new devices and the second place is taken by boys 18% and
then
the rest. For music
adults
, men and women spent the same 5% amount of
money
, but others spent much more
money
for example
:
children
spent 39%, boys spent 38% and girls spent 40% proportion of their
money
on music. And for videos
adults
, men and women spent a little bit of
money
but others spent more
money
than these three,
for example
,
children
spent 12% of the
money
, boys spent 18% of their
money
and girls spent 17% of the
money
only the videos
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