The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs
illustrates
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the
percentage
of households with different kinds of technologies in the
united states
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United States
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between 1995 to 1999.
Overall
, different kinds of technologies are increasing in every
households
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household
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. As we can see, the use of washing machine is leading from 1995 to 1999.
However
, DVD
Player
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Players
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dips to fourth place from third place and eventually
having
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have
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the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
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percentage
in
the
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apply
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households.
Initially
, the
growth
of washing
machine
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machines
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from 1995 to 1996 is equal to the
growth
in
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from
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1996 to 1999. Meanwhile, The
growth
of computer
percentage
is followed by the
growth
of
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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with it having a bigger breakthrough in the
last
year.
However
,
significant
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a significant
the significant
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increase
of
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in
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Phone
Percentage
shown
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was shown
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from 1995 to 1999 and its
growth
has been leading in the
last
Four Years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, growth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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