The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs
illustrates
the Change the verb form
illustrate
percentage
of households with different kinds of technologies in the united states
between 1995 to 1999.
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United States
Overall
, different kinds of technologies are increasing in every households
. As we can see, the use of washing machine is leading from 1995 to 1999. Change to a singular noun
household
However
, DVD Player
dips to fourth place from third place and eventually Fix the agreement mistake
Players
having
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have
least
Correct word choice
lowest
percentage
in the
households.
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apply
Initially
, the growth
of washing machine
from 1995 to 1996 is equal to the Fix the agreement mistake
machines
growth
in
1996 to 1999. Meanwhile, The Change preposition
from
growth
of computer percentage
is followed by the growth
of Add an article
the internet
internet
with it having a bigger breakthrough in the Capitalize word
Internet
last
year.
However
, significant
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a significant
the significant
of
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in
Percentage
shown
from 1995 to 1999 and its Add a missing verb
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growth
has been leading in the last
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