Mrs Jones, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town , has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrett. In your letter Suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available
Hello Mrs. Jones
I hope you are well. Myself Mrs. Barrett. I am 30 years old. Recently, I read your advertisement in
local
newspaper for Add an article
the local
a local
helper
and I am one of Correct article usage
a helper
them
who likes Correct pronoun usage
those
do
daily household Fix the infinitive
to do
works
. Now, I am a housewife so I am used to Fix the agreement mistake
work
do
Change the verb form
doing
that
all Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
the works
works
like cooking, cleaning, Change the verb form
work
Laundary
and other Correct your spelling
laundry
works
too. Cleaning is my hobby as I Fix the agreement mistake
work
am very fascinate
Change the verb form
am very fascinated
for
arrange stuff in order. Change preposition
to
Also
, in the past I lived in joint
family so, I had to cook daily for 10 people so nowadays cooking is my lefthand task.
Currently, I am Correct article usage
a joint
mother
of 8 Add an article
a mother
the mother
months
old baby so I can't do work full time but, I can come dailyFix the agreement mistake
month
4
-5 hours in Change preposition
for 4
morning
when my baby is Add an article
the morning
sleep
. Wrong verb form
sleeping
Also
, when he will
sick I can't come. So. if you are fine with my daily schedule Verb problem
is
then
I am very
good person for your advertisement.
I hope you will understand my current situation and give me Add an article
a very
positive
response.
Correct article usage
a positive
your
faithfully
Mrs. BarrettCorrect the word
yours
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure to clearly structure your letter by dividing it into paragraphs that each cover one main idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the flow between sentences for better coherence.
Task Achievement
The letter manages to address all parts of the task.
Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for addressing a potential employer.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite