Mrs Jones, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town , has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrett. In your letter Suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available

Hello Mrs. Jones I hope you are well. Myself Mrs. Barrett. I am 30 years old. Recently, I read your advertisement in
local
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newspaper for
helper
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a helper
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and I am one of
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those
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who likes
do
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daily household
works
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. Now, I am a housewife so I am used to
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that
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all
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works
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like cooking, cleaning,
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laundry
and other
works
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too. Cleaning is my hobby as I
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for
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arrange stuff in order.
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, in the past I lived in
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family so, I had to cook daily for 10 people so nowadays cooking is my lefthand task. Currently, I am
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a mother
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of 8
months
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old baby so I can't do work full time but, I can come daily
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-5 hours in
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the morning
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when my baby is
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.
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, when he
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sick I can't come. So. if you are fine with my daily schedule
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good person for your advertisement. I hope you will understand my current situation and give me
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response.
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faithfully Mrs. Barrett
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure to clearly structure your letter by dividing it into paragraphs that each cover one main idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the flow between sentences for better coherence.
Task Achievement
The letter manages to address all parts of the task.
Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for addressing a potential employer.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household chores
  • domestic tasks
  • organizing
  • gardening
  • experience
  • availability
  • commitments
  • gain experience
  • relationship
  • advertised
  • help in her home
  • build a relationship
  • free time
  • specific days
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