The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line
graph
shows data on the ratio of travelling abroad by
UK
natives ,and quantity of overseas
residents
that visited
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the
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UK
,between 1979 and 1999
while
, the bar
graph
demonstrates information about the most favoured
countries
that went by
UK
inhabitants in 1999.
Overall
,it can be clearly seen that
,
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the number of
UK
residents
going to foreign
countries
from the
UK
showed a considerable increase ,between 1979 and 1999;
then
that off in
quantity
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the quantity
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of visiting
UK
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the UK
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by overseas
residents
experienced less increase
in contrast
with the first trend over the given time .
Furthermore
, the most popular country that was visited by
UK
residents
was France through 5
countries
, in 1999. When it comes to the line
graph
, the number of
UK
residents
visiting overseas
countries
began below 15 in 1979 ,and by 1999
this
figure moved up to over 50
million
.
Then
at the beginning of the time span, around 10
million
tourists went to the
UK
before climbing steadily up to almost 30
million
by the end of the given time. As regards the bar
graph
, France and Spain were in the top 2
countries
which were visited by foreigners mostly with 10
million
UK
residents
,and about 9
million
tourists respectively in 1999. Visitors in the
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US
and Greece were 2 times and 3 times less visitors relatively compared to that of France and Spain.
However
, the least popular country considered Turkey, which had only around 2
million
UK
residents
went there .
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