People who buy friendly vehicles like electric cars should receive a subsidy on tax. This will discourage people from buying polluting cars and thus lower emissions. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

In
this
modern era, traffic
conjestion
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congestion
is one of
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problem
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in recent times which
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the environment
indirecly
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indirectly
.
However
, some people concur that buying eco-friendly
vehicles
should receive a subsidy on tax which
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many
problem
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such
as climate change, traffic
conjestion
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congestion
and so on. In my opinion, the former statement
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to be more rational. I will elaborate in more
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and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. First of all, many people
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like to own private
vehicle
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as transportation
due to
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various reasons. By considering the
society
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issue, individuals contribute to
buy
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eco-friendly
vehicles
.
For instance
, CO2 and
green house
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gases are
emitting
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from
the
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vehicles
which
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human
well being
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. If consumers prefer to buy friendly
vehicles
such
as
car
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cars
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,
bikes
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, no emission gases come from
vehicles
, it will
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for
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the
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society.
Hence
it's apparent why many people are favouring
this
trend.
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introduction conclusion
Improve the introduction by clearly outlining your main arguments. Currently, the introduction is somewhat vague and could better set up the structure of the essay.
support
Develop your main points further with more specific examples and explanations. Currently, there is a lack of specific examples to support your claims about eco-friendly vehicles and their benefits.
introduction conclusion
Add a conclusion to summarize your arguments and state your final position clearly. A clear conclusion will enhance the coherence of your essay.
complete response
The essay addresses the task prompt by discussing the issue of eco-friendly vehicles and subsidies.
logical structure
Attempted logical structure by introducing the topic and suggesting a solution; this provides a basic framework for discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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