The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007

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The given graph gives information about the amount of three different types of spreads (margarine,

butter

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, and low-fat and reduced spreads) consumed between 1981 and 2007. Units are measured in

grams

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Overall

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while

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the consumption of both margarine and

butter

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spreads decreased in the given period, an increased trend was found in low-fat and reduced spreads.

Butter

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was the most popular spread at the start of the period,

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low-fat and reduced spreads were the most widely consumed

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. The amount of

butter

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consumed started at around 140

grams

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in 1981 and

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peaked at approximately 160

grams

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in 1986, before declining dramatically to about 50

grams

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in the

last

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year. In the meantime, margarine consumption started at around 90

grams

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in the first year and decreased slightly to 80

grams

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in 1986, after which the figure fluctuated slowly and dropped to 40

grams

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in 2007.

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, the consumption of low fat and reduced spreads only started in 1996 at around 10

grams

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then

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it sharply climbed to reach its peak of above 80

grams

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in 2001, before dropping slightly to approximately 70

grams

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at the end

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of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words butter, grams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

195 words

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The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007

The line below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011.

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