The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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shows a line graph of the
books
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borrowed from four village libraries and a pie chart of various types of
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borrowed. It is clear from both given information that the most popular type of borrowed
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is
about
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Fiction topic, and the demand for
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has fluctuated over time.
According to
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what is shown in a line graph, the Ryeslip library had a sharp decrease in the number of borrowed
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(from 300 - to 170).
Then
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, on the other side, there is an increase in the number of borrowed
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from both West Eation and Church Mount.
While
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we clearly noticed that there is a sharp fluctuation in Sutton Wood`s demand for
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that the demand for
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from different villages is not constant,
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, the percentages of
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books
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types are contrasting. People are more interested in fiction
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,
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then
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the
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biography
books
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come in the second level of
readers
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readers'
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interest. In the end, the Science, Self-Help, and History topics attracted a
little
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small
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percentage of readers' attention.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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