You recently stayed at your friends's place to look after the house while he/she is away. you accidently damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to your friend. in your lettter you should describe what the accident was explain when it happened. suggest how you damage can be fixed.

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Dear Joyce, I hope

this

letter finds you well. I'm writing

this

letter to

letting

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you know that by

mistakally

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mistake

I broke your juicer

while

making juice for me. I will explain you in detail. Today morning, I was in

hurry

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as I woke up late and I had to reach

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my job early. Because of that, when I was making

dry-fruit

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a dry-fruit

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shake,

mixture

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the mixture

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was

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suddenly stopped and it

was

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smells

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like burning

and

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after I turned off the machine

instantlly

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instantly

. I would like to apologise for my mistake and

likes

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to tell you that I can fix your juicer before you come back because I know one shop where they can repair damaged items. So, don't worry about it. So sorry for

this

mistake. See you soon Yours lovingly D

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grammar

Ensure to proofread for typos and grammatical mistakes, such as 'letting you know' instead of 'to letting you know,' or 'smells like burning.'

clarity

Try to provide a clearer explanation of the accident and when exactly it occurred to improve the logical flow.

tone

The greeting and closing are appropriately warm and friendly, which suits the context of writing to a friend.

task response

The letter addresses all parts of the task, including explaining the accident and suggesting a solution.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

132 words

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