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The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates the numbers of visitors at one social centre in Melbourne Australia for different activity groups between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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while
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participants
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 for table tennis and musical shows steadily increased, the numbers for film club and martial arts fluctuated throughout the given period. Table tennis began at around 18 in 2000 and increased to 20 in 2005.
While
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 the
number
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 stayed the same until 2010, it almost tripled in 2020 to around 55.
Similarly
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although
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 only started in 2005,
participants
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 for musical performances grew to 10 in 2010 and constantly rose to just under 20 in 2020.
Although
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 fluctuated, film club
participants
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 continued to be the highest. After decreasing slightly from around 65 in 2000 to 60 in 2010, the
number
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 went up to just around 68 in 2020.
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, in martial arts after declining to around 30 in 2005, the
number
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 went up to just under 40 in 2010.
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, the
number
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 went down again in 2015 but grew slightly to just around 36 in 2020.
Conversely
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although
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 increased slightly in 2005,
participants
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 in amateur dramatics plummeted from just under 30 in 2005 to around 6 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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