The table graph provides information on marriage trends in Australia over a 40- year period from 1960 to 2000.

The table graph provides information on marriage trends in Australia over a 40- year period from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, religious
marriages
saw a decline ,
while
civil
marriages
experienced significant growth.
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,y, the ages of
brides
and
grooms
showed a steady increase throughout
this
period. In detail, the distinguishes between religious and civil
marriages
. In 1960, there were 42,000 religious
marriages
and 8,000 civil
marriages
. Over the next decade, both
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of
marriages
increased to three and four respectively. In 1980, religious
marriages
experienced
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trend during the year,
also
civil increased to 16,000 at that time.
However
, by 1990 , religious
marriages
had decreased to 32,000 ,
whereas
civil
marriages
slightly increased to 36,000 ,
while
civil
marriages
reached their highest recorded level. Regarding the
age
of marriage, in 1960 , the average
age
for
brides
and
grooms
in Australia was 21 and 23 years, respectively. By 1970 , the average
age
for
brides
had risen to 23, and for
grooms
, it was 25.
This
trend continued, with the average
ages
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age
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increasing by roughly two years by 1980. In 19990, the average
age
of
brides
was 28,
while
grooms
were 29. By the end of the period in 2000, the average
age
of
brides
was 31, marking a significant increase from previous years,
while
grooom's
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groom's
grom's
ages remained slightly higher.
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