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The line graph gives information on cinema attendance in the UK.

The line graph gives information on cinema attendance in the UK.
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, the number of people who attended
in
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the cinema increased with some fluctuations ,
ages
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the ages
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 of 44-54
was
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were
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leading
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the leading
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 position in terms of watching films,
while
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 the age group 14-24 indicated the
least
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lowest
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 rates in
the
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most of the years of the graph.
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, in 2000 all trends decreased and rose dramatically
at the end
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 of the period.

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