The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The given graph illustrates the
number
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of average carbon dioxide (CO2)
emissions
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per person in European Countries from 1967 to 2007. Generally,
it is clear that
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in 1967 the
UK
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had the highest amount of CO2
emissions
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,
while
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Portugal was
in
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the lowest. Surprisingly, it turned out that
at the end
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of the given
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period
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Sweden and Portugal had the same
number
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of CO2
emissions
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,
while
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the
UK
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still
being
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the highest. In 1967, the
number
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of CO2
emissions
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per capita in the
UK
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stood at 11 metric
tonnes
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, higher than the other four countries.
However
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, there was a slight drop to 9 metric
tonnes
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at the end
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of the
period
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. The
number
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of CO2
emissions
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in Sweden followed an almost similar trend as in the
UK
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,
started
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at 8 metric
tonnes
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, but in 1977 the
number
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of CO2
emissions
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rose sharply to 11 metric
tonnes
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and continued to drop significantly to 5 metric
tonnes
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over the three decades.
In contrast
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, Italy and Portugal showed a nearly rose pattern over the
period
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. Portugal began at the lowest
number
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(1 metric
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tonnes
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) and increased dramatically until
reach
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reached
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the same
number
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as
a
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Sweden
at the end
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of the
period
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(5 metric
tonnes
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).
Also
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, for
Italy
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Italy,
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there was a sharp increase in the
number
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which almost
reach
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reached
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two times higher than in the first
of
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the
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apply
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period
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(4 metric
tonnes
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to 8 metric
tonnes
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).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, co, emissions, uk, period, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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