The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The given table and charts
demonstrates
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data about the number of police budget in
sources
of Britain from 2017 to 2018. The table illustrates how
to
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income and the pie charts
provide
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how much it was spent. From an
overall
perspective, it is obvious that the budgets from
table
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all of the
sources
experienced a slight increase between 2017 and 2018.
While
,
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both of the pie charts the source of salaries dominated.
However
, the figure
of
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buildings and transport
was remained
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a stability
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. As regards
to
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budgets from 2017 to 2018, the financial gains of
national
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government
was
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175.5
million
in 2017, but in 2018
this
figur's
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figure
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budget increased slightly
at
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177.8
million
. The
sources
of local taxes and total experienced a minor incline from 91.2
million
and 304.7
million
in 2017 to 102.3
million
and 318.6
million
in 2018 respectively.
Moreover
,
in
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other
sources
saw
a minor changes
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, at approximately 0.5
million
revenue
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. Turning to how the money was spent in two years, the distribution
for
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salaries was the most popular in all years, about 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. Whileast, the buildings and transport remained
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unchanged
.
Furthermore
, the technology's expenditure doubled between 2017 and 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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