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Many organisations and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? What kind of jobs should have a work uniform?

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These days, a whole host of organizations
such
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 as governmental ones have required their employees to wear informal
clothes
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 which are alike other
memebrs
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members
 in the workplace. There are some pros and cons in terms of
this
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issue
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 which will be explained in
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 essay.
To begin
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 with, there are some careers which require their
staff
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 to wear
uniform
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uniforms
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, including organizations
where
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that
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 are government-oriented, including banks, schools, and offices related to
government
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the government
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 itself. There are some drawbacks regarding
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issue
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. Unconvenient may be problematic to
staff
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 when they do overtime, meaning that they have
hard
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a hard
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 time wearing formal
clothes
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 for a long time.
This
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 results in inefficiency which might not be beneficial for the entire purposes of an organization.
Furthermore
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, people are more likely to break the relationship between
staff
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 and their bosses unless they are allowed their
desireable
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desirable
clothes
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 at
workplace
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the workplace
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.
Consequently
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, the employers may seem unfriendly which
cause
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causes
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the
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a
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 reduction of motivation in the members of the
staff
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.
Nonetheless
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, it is fair to mention that
this
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issue
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 can have some benefits as well. First and foremost, individuals who wear
such
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clothes
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 at offices can create a unique impression for the customers, which means the reduction of distractions for both clients and
staff
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. Take governmental companies as an example when there are a myriad of customers in a company every single day, it is impossible for clients to find one
members
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member
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 of
staff
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 in the crowd.
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, wearing
uniform
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the uniform
a uniform
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 can play a crucial
roles
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role
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 in the
unitidy
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unity
untidy
 of a company. Having
descipline
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discipline
 in an organization
as
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is
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 another merit of
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issue
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.
In other words
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, it is necessary that companies comply with the regulations as soon as they wish to work for a productive company.
To conclude
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, currently, a vast
majoriy
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majority
 of
oraganization
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organisations
 which are government-oriented, namely banks, schools, and offices related to
itself
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themselves
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 have forced their employees to wear
uniform
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uniforms
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.
Although
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 there are some disadvantages
such
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 as being hard to distinguish between clients and
staff
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as well as
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distructing
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distracting
destructing
 a perfect relationship between employers and employees.
However
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, there are some positives for
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issue
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,
such
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 as maintaining the
unitidy
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unity
untidy
 and discipline.

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coherence cohesion
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Work on maintaining clarity and comprehensiveness in your ideas. Ensure that each paragraph clearly conveys a unique point that ties back to the question.
coherence cohesion
The essay has both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame your arguments well.
task achievement
You have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms in the workplace, which addresses the task appropriately.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional image
  • sense of pride
  • brand recognition
  • perceived status differences
  • individual expression
  • job satisfaction
  • customer-facing roles
  • retail, hospitality, healthcare
  • safety or protective gear
  • easy identification
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