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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart illustrates the rate of
literacy
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 among both female and male genders in six various
countries
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 in 2000.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
while
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 a significant number of people in
south
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South
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Asia
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 had the highest average
of
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apply
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literacy
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, those who lived in developed
countries
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 had the lowest rate of
literacy
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.
To begin
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 with,
while
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 women who lived in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states, and South
Asia
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, were in the highest position in terms of
literacy
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rates
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, those who lived in regions including, east
Asia
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, Latin America and
also
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 developed
countries
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 had the lowest
rates
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 of
literacy
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, by 20, nearly 10 and approximately 2
percent
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per cent
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the male generation who lived in East
Asia
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, Latin America, and developed
countries
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 had the lowest
literacy
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rates
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,
in contrast
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, those who lived in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states, and South
Asia
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, were in the highest levels of
literacy
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rates
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.
Moreover
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, in comparison, the
overall
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rates
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 of
literacy
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 among female generations were significantly higher than male generations.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, countries, asia, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy rates
  • gender gap
  • regional disparities
  • socio-economic factors
  • male literacy
  • female literacy
  • overviews
  • notable differences
  • highest literacy regions
  • moderate literacy regions
  • lowest literacy regions
  • estimated data
  • educational attainment
  • cultural influences
  • development levels
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