The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
line graph illustrates the average change month by month in the prices of three metals in the year 2014.
Generally speaking, these three types of metal had high
correlation Add an article
a high
of
their price Change preposition
with
variation
. However
, in the given period, Zinc remained reletively
steady among the others Correct your spelling
relatively
while
nickel saw the most of treamdous
Correct your spelling
tremendous
fluctuaion
.
As presented, nickel has the highest Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
variation
rate in the
January, but it plummeted from January to June. The value of January and June was 6% and -3%, respectively. Change the article
apply
Furthermore
, the value rose up to -1% in the next month,
and remained steady until October. In Remove the comma
apply
these period
, Change the determiner
this period
these periods
variation
of Correct article usage
the variation
nickle
was the lowest than other materials.
The Correct your spelling
nickel
variation
of Copper and Zinc was less than nickel, but they surpass
it by around May and Wrong verb form
surpassed
Fabuary
respectively. Correct your spelling
February
Although
the price variation
of copper wasn't
Verb problem
didn't
fluctuated
as others, it Wrong verb form
fluctuate
surpass
the others in June.
Wrong verb form
surpassed
To conclude
, most of the metals showed Correct article usage
a down
down trend
. Correct your spelling
downtrend
However
, all of their value were
no significant change Change the verb form
was
of
after 1 year went by.Change preposition
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words variation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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