Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people?
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited
international
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by international
visitors
, not native people
. In my opinion, they are not interest
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are not interested
are not interesting
to
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in wasting
waste
time and money
. Because they seen
these Add the auxiliary verb
saw
have seen
places
before.
On the other hand
, Firstly
, many native people
seen
these Add the auxiliary verb
saw
have seen
places
before because these places
are familiar to every native peolpe
. Correct your spelling
people
For
this
reason
they do not want to Add a comma
reason,
a
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apply
waste
of
time. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, these places
are famous and these
areas ticket prices Change preposition
in these
so
expensive. Many local Rephrase
are very
people
income is less. They want to save Change noun form
people's
money
, and they do not agree to waste
of
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apply
money
in these places
. Thirdly
, many local people
lack of
knowledge about these Remove the preposition
apply
places
who
are uneducated they do not know about Correct word choice
and
valuable
things of these Correct article usage
the valuable
places
. They can damage these things. Finally
, many local people
think it is just a waste
of time. In Bangladesh, 96% of visitors
are international and 4% of visitors
are local people
. Because local people
not
interested Add a missing verb
are not
for
seeing these Change preposition
in
places
again.
On the another
hand, the authorities should Correct quantifier usage
other
provides
Change the verb form
provide
discount
on tickets or give free tickets Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
for
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to
local
public. If not Add an article
the local
less
ticket prices local Correct word choice
lower
people
do not go these
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to these
places
because they want to save money
. So government
should at least weekly provide Correct article usage
the government
discount
for Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
local
public. And another thing government should Add an article
the local
training
uneducated Wrong verb form
train
people
so that they could not damage these valuable things.
In conclusion, many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by visitors
. Local people
do not go there . Authorities should less tickets price
and should provide training Fix the agreement mistake
ticket prices
of
uneducated Change preposition
for
people
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