وتبين الرسوم البيانية أدناه النسب المئوية للرجال والنساء الذين تتراوح أعمارهم بين 60 و 64 عاما في أربعة بلدان في عامي 1970 و 2000
يلخص المعلومات عن طريق اختيار الميزات الرئيسية والإبلاغ عنها ، وإجراء مقارنة عند الاقتضاء.
يجب أن تكتب 150 كلمة على الأقل.
يوفر هذا الرسم البياني معلومات أساسية حول عمالة النساء والرجال في أستراليا واليابان والولايات المتحدة وبيجيوم ، بين عامي 1970 و 2000.
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بشكل عام ، إذا رأينا الرجال الذين تتراوح أعمارهم بين 60 و 64 عاما في جميع البلدان الأربعة ، فإن النسب المئوية لعام 1970 أعلى بكثير من 2000 نسب. إذا تحدثنا عن النساء ، اللائي كن منخفضات في أستراليا وبيجيوم في عامي 1970 و 2000 ، من ناحية أخرى ، فإن النسب المئوية لليابان والولايات المتحدة أعلى.
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وفقا لما هو موضح في بيانات الرجال ، في عام 1970 كان لدى اليابان أول واحد ، تليها Beigium ، وكان لدى الولايات المتحدة 73٪ وأستراليا 74٪ قريبان جدا من بعضهما البعض ، بينما في عام 2000 ، Beigium هو الأدنى الذي كان 19 ، ولا تزال اليابان الأعلى بنسبة 76٪
Conclusion
من حيث عمر المرأة ، ستلاحظ أن اليابان هي الأعلى في عام 1970 و 200 بنسبة مور من 40٪ ، بعد ذلك ، جاءت الولايات المتحدة بأكثر من 35٪ ، لكن أدنى البلدان في النساء المسنات هي بلجيكا بأقل من 10 ..
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