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Band 3.5

road transport is taking over rail service. discuss the positive effects of this development. is this situation true for your country?

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Increasing
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 amount of motor vehicles
are
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 making people use
roads
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 more often, as easier means of transport, reducing the usage of trains.
While
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this
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 development seems sophisticated for vehicle owners, it has some environmental drawbacks. The current state of my country is discussed in
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 essay. There are many advantages of commuting through
roads
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 rather than railways.
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, a person or a business can have the luxury of time,
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 a person can commute on their leisure, a business can deliver,
transport
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 goods over a short distance quickly and efficiently
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 accessing remote
location
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locations
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 where rail
route
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routes
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 cannot reach. On the downside, environmental effects, a train can carry hundreds of
passenger
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passengers
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 and
majority
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the majority
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 of trains
are operating
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operate
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 on electricity eliminating emissions,
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vehicle
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the vehicle
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 runs on fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 which is the major contributor
of
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to
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 pollution and
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases, and as the number of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 user increases the carbon emissions increases with it,
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 the trains can operate during the harsh weather, it is difficult to drive during rain and snowy days.
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, road transportation in
canada
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Canada
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 has the edge over rail transport, as the rail network is not as vast as the road network, there
are
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 numerous remote
location
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locations
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 which can
be access
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be accessed
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 only through
roads
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,
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 is why both options have pros and cons but
roads
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 are more
efficent
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efficient
.

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task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay clearly distinguishes between the positive effects and environmental drawbacks in separate sections.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the discussion.
task achievement
The response takes a balanced view by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of road transport.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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